Lacanian Approach to “The Lie"

     In “The Lie” by Kurt Vonnegut Jr., the character Eli possesses the unlimited devotion of his parents, experiences poor parental communication, and is under a great deal of academic pressure. I can relate to the character Eli because my parents would do just about anything for me and at times I also struggle to talk to my parents. My parents also pressure me to be the best academically that I can be.

Intro: Focused intro and thesis.  Intro could be more developed and try to make the thesis match the structure of the statement before it.  Having the academic part of your thesis as its own sentence seems awkward.

     To begin with, Eli like myself, has parents that would do anything to help their child succeed and have a better life. In the story, when Eli’s father finds out that he was not admitted to Whitehill, he immediately tried to change the minds of the board members. “I’m going to see how quickly people can change their minds around here…there’s a majority of the board of Overseers in this room at this very moment. Everyone one a close friend of mine, or a close friend of my father. If they tell Doctor Warren Eli’s in, that’s it-Eli’s in." His father tried to do what he thought was best for his son by attempting to coerce his admittance to the school by using the family name. By doing this, Eli’s father was compromising his own integrity for the benefit of his son. Though my parents have never done anything like this, they have given up many things so that I may benefit. For example, before I started to play sports, my parents used to play in a volleyball league. As I grew older and my sports began to take more time, they quit their league so that they could watch me play and offer encouragement. Both Eli’s and my parents possesses great devotion for the well being of their child.

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-- Try this: To begin, Eli, like myself, has parents that would do anything to help their child succeed and have a better life.

-- possess (pl)
-- Good parallels and it is Lacanian in spirit.  However, you are only brushing the surface with a literal parallel between The Remenzels and your parents.  Remember, Lacanian is really symbolic.  In other words, yes, saying the Remezels and your parents are similar is Lacanian but if you were to say that the Remenzels were symbolic of the mother-image that protects you – an image that you need to break away from perhaps – then you are truly writing Lacanian.  Also, remember that Lacan said that specific words and their connotations really represent our psychological response.  In your paragraph, you are really just dealing with the situation instead of specific language.


     Next, a resemblance between the character Eli and My self is apparent in “The Lie” because, at times, we both fail to communicate with our parents. Eli stored within him the anger and frustration that he felt due to being forced to attend Whitehill Prep School. He did not feel comfortable telling his father that he had other thoughts and dreams that he wanted to follow. This lack of communication caused a lot of problems between the two of them. “…I tried to tell you a couple of times-but I just couldn’t. I didn’t know how.” Eli and I both seem deficient in the ability to communicate with our parents, and this allowed me to relate better to him in the story. For example, my parents may want me to go to an after school enrichment that I do not want to attend, but because they would be disappointed if I didn’t go, I don’t tell them my true feelings. Eli does the same thing when he fails to tell his mother and father that he doesn’t want to attend Whitehill, and then again when he does not tell his parents that he wasn’t accepted. Eli’s and I had similar shortcomings, therefore, I could relate well to him.

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-- myself not My self…excellent diction “deficient” is an interesting choice!

-- Exact same comments as paragraph 2 above.  Here, rather than interpreting Eli’s inability to communicate with your parents as a literal parallel to your inability to communicate with your parents, dig deeper.  Lacan might say that Eli’s problem here is really symbolic of your fear of leaving the mother image (in Lacan, our origins are represented by the mother) and even worse fear of not being accepted by others (in Lacan, others in society are represented by the father).  In other words, get to the heart of WHY you cannot communicate, what is holding you back.  Again, too, you are dealing more with what happens in the story than the language it was expressed in.  For example, don’t just settle for saying you both cannot communicate with your parents in general.  Instead, focus in on the way Vonnegut says it. Perhaps the phrase, “I didn’t know how,” is particularly significant and appeals deeply to how you feel about communication with your parents.  See how that is different than just saying that you and Eli just can’t do it.  It’s more specific and gets down to the real reasons….

     Finally, the academic pressures placed upon me are like Eli’s because the pressures come from our parents. Eli’s parents expected too much from him, and they did not accept him for who he was. "Your father and I have always made you feel that you had to go to Whitehill, that nothing else would do." My parents are like Eli’s because they want me to accomplish as much as possible and to meet their expectations. Also, Eli is a reflection of the person that I am, because in the story, when Eli learns that he has not been accepted, he feels ashamed and cannot tell his parents. Whenever I have failed in my own mind or have scored poorly on an assignment, I am always reluctant to show my parents. I feel this way because, like Eli’s parents, my parents expect nothing but the best from their child. In the short story, “The Lie,” the character Eli portrays my feelings because we are both pressured academically.

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Same as 2 and 3 above.  Here, we have an even better chance to help you understand Lacanian.  Instead of literally interpreting the academic expectations for you and Eli, be symbolic.  Your reaction to the pressure you both are under is right on, yes!  But, Lacan would say that the academic pressure is really symbolic of the psychological pressure you feel to please your parents in general or, even deeper, the pressure you have subconsciously to balance the need to please your origins (the mother) and be accepted by society (the father).  You could even go deeper and say that the pressure is actually your struggle to define who you are separately from your parents.  After all, though the pressure to please our parents seems to come from them, any good psychologist will tell you it actually comes from within ourselves.

     In conclusion, in the story “The Lie,” Eli is a reflection of who I am. The facts that we both are privileged to have the devotion of our parents, we both fail to communicate properly with our parents at times, and we both have academic pressures makes us mirror reflection of each other.

Conclusion: Needs a lot of work.

 

Overall

 

Pretty good paper!  You have the form down and clearly understand that the point of a Lacanian essay is to explore yourself through the character.  The only difficulties you had were with depth, specifically with seeing the story as symbolic of your inner psychology rather than as literally parallel and with examining the language of story itself rather than just the events and situations in expresses.  Don’t feel bad at all, though.  Those are the two hardest parts, and, frankly, I do not expect that many freshmen, even honors freshmen, will make that huge leap of understanding in one paper!  You’ve done a fine job and shall therefore receive a good grade.  Oh, but, your intro and conclusion leave much to be desired.  You really need to work on those – they made your grade lower than it needed to be.

 

Grade: B-  82/100